Essay 13
True Love;
Do you Fall, Find, or Discover it?
An Essay By Hanna Rose Kronholm
Mr.H.Salsich
Wednesday, April 27, 2011
Have you ever thought about how you might find love? You may not be searching for it, but love may find you. Real love survives through anything and everything. Love found my grandparents and one day I hope it comes to me too.
I believe that true love, real love, will find me, whether I find love, or love encounters me. I may not be looking for love, searching for the right person, comparing people, asking myself who I like, wishing I had someone, coming to that day that I do find someone, hoping they love me the same way I love them. I may run into love many times but really true love is something I think you only come across once in your life. I think it takes a good amount of time to build love, strengthening a bond, loving the other person the way they love you, building a healthy relationship, falling in fervor with that special person. I've been told that love is worth the wait and when you have fallen in love you'll know it. I believe that some people can fall in love at first sight. I feel that love will not just find me but everyone.
When I think of a truly loving relationship, the two people that stand out in my mind are my grandparents. My mom's parents have been happily married for 46 years. They have gone through most of their life together, loving each other, building not only a house but a home, raising their five children, working through struggles and problems, experiencing the good times and the bad. All of these things are what I think makes their love so strong. They are always happy when they are around each other; they have the time of their lives together each and every day and cherish everything. My grandparents trust each other and lean on one another for support. The loving relationship my grandparents have is amazing, and I hope someday I will find love like they did.
Love can happen when you least expect it. When you find love you should hold onto it and cherish it forever. I know that people say that love is magical; I hope that when I encounter love it’s magical for me too. I believe that love never dies.
Self Assessment-
1.) I think that I could work on making my paragraphs a little more descriptive and add more detail.
2.) One thing that I am particularly proud of is my introduction paragraph and my taffy sentences. I feel like I did a very good job on them both.
3.) One thing that I could work on for next time would be having more F.A.S.T. words they would help make my paragraphs not as repetitive.
4.) I would give myself a B+ on this essay I fell like I did a very good job and I put a lot of time and effort into it.
Dear Hanna,
ReplyDeleteI liked your conclusion paragraph. I can tell you put a lot of thought into it, and it really does show. I would suggest that you proofread in the future because there are a few minor mistakes. I also suggest that you add some more echo words or if you have them highlight them so the reader can see them. I thought you did a fantastic job on this essay.