Essay #4

Trespassing

  Or Being Curious 

An Essay by Hanna Rose

9th grade  English B

Pine Point School 

 Have you ever thought about going onto some one's land and looking through their windows? Well it's illegal and in this chapter Scout and Jem go onto the Radley's property and look through their windows, hoping to see something, wishing that they could see Boo. They also cause a big commotion by sneaking around and waking up lots of neighbors. I don't think it was a good idea to go onto their property.

TS The children invade the Radley's privacy and trespass on their land, which causes lots of problems. SD They shouldn’t have gone onto the Radley’s property because it’s an invasion. CM “We crept to the side of the house,” because it's not their house Scout and Jem shouldn’t be walking so close and looking through windows.  CM It's also not nice how they touch their house, and lean against the windows. SD They are disrespectful to Boo and his brother Nathan, walking on their property and sneaking around. CM This causes lots of commotion; Nathan Radley ends up shooting a gun “ the gun shot broken across his arm.” CM They also wake up many people and disturb the neighborhood. SD The children also treat Boo Radley poorly. CM The sad thing is that they don’t even know Boo and they’re saying that he isn't a nice person. They are judging Boo before they get to know him or even see him, like judging a book by its cover.CM They are taught to be polite to all adults but in this case they treat  the Radleys very poorly and they don't care. CS The children should think about if they were the Radleys would they like people walking around and looking in their windows and invading their privacy.

I hope that they have learned from the shooting experience and never trespass on other peoples' land again. They have caused a big ruckus and disturbed lots of people especially the Radleys. Scout and Jem don't deserve to see Boo because they were on land that they weren't suppose to be on. I don't think that they meant to make this a big deal, waking up so many people, but every action has its consequences and they are definitely going to get in trouble.


Self- Assessment

1.) One thing that i like about this essay is the long sentence, with participles. I think i did a good job lengthening it.

2.) One thing i am working on is coming up with more describing words.

3.) One weak point is the way i use words over again

4.) If i had to grade this i would give myself a B-