Essay #5

                                                                                                 Crying
                                                                                         Is Not a Weakness
                                                                               An Essay by Hanna Rose
                                                                                         October 14, 2010
                                                                                                  English 8b
                                                                                       Pine Point School



People cry about many different things. They cry because they are happy, sad, overwhelmed or in pain. Most people associate crying as sadness, but it is not always heartbreaking. I do not think that crying is always a sign of misery. It can also be a sign that you are scared or overly excited.

TS Crying is not a weakness; but some people are embarrassed to cry. SD I think Jem was crying because someone had filled the knothole with cement. CM1 This seemed to really bother Jem; it bothered him so much because he thought that Boo was filling the knothole with presents. CM2 Jem did not feel it was fair that Nathan Radley filled it up with cement because he was cutting off any connection that Boo had to the outside world. SD2 Jem was hiding himself from crying in front of Scout  "but I (Scout) thought it odd that I (Scout) did not hear him." CM Jem probably assumed that everyone else judged it as a big deal ,and as bad as he felt he did not want people to know that he had been crying. CM2 Jem was crying for a long enough time that his eyes were red ,and "his face was dirty in the right places." CS Jem is scared to show people that he was crying because he thinks it is a personal flaw.

TS: People cry for so many reasons. SD: Is it okay to cry? CM: I think that it is fine to cry; I do not think it's a weakness, it's just an emotion. CM: Not everyone feels that way though, and so they hide their feelings. SD: One specific memory I have of crying is when my parents told me that my mom had breast cancer. CM: I cried for many reasons and  many thoughts jumped through my head. CM I was overwhelmed with emotion. CM The first thing that went through my head was losing her and what was going to happen. CS: Although people cry and it is usually a sad thing, it is not always a bad thing.  

         

                Crying is great way to let out your emotions. If people are ashamed of crying, they will never be able to let go of their insecurities and problems. When people cry they are usually embarrassed and they tend to cry in a place where few people can see them. Crying is not a horrible thing to do, it does not show that you are weak; it simply shows that you have feelings that need to be expressed.

Self Assessment-
1.) One of my strong points is probably the second chunk in the second paragraph it was a easy thing to write about because it actually happened to me. I think that it flows with elegance very well.
2.) One weak point is probably the first paragraph. I Think i can work harder on the first sentence.
3.) One thing I'm working on is transitions between paragraphs. I think that it will help my writing a lot.
4.) On this essay about Crying i would give myself a B+, I feel that i worked very hard on it and polished it to make it perfect. I also feel that there is a lot of good writing in the paragraphs.