Thursday, November 18, 2010

ESSAY #8

 A Persons Lonely Life;
Is Not Always Bad
An Essay By Hanna Kronholm 
11.20.10
Loneliness is every where weather we know it or not. People are lonely for many reasons, just because there lonely doesn't mean they're sad. They may enjoy being lonely and it might not be what you are thinking, they don't have to be walking around with their head down, knowing that they are alone, wishing that they had a friend, or hoping that they had a different life. They could be very content with their life, and not want to change anything.
          TS Dill is a very lonely person who makes things up to get attention. SD He tells stories that didn't actually happen and has a tendency to exaggerate things so that people will pay more attention to him. CM When Dill is telling Jem and Scout how he got to Maycomb he tells them, " I discovered a small animal show. I traveled with the show." CM Scout discovers that he took a train; she apprehends that he lied and this is not the first time. Dill thinks that he would become friendless if he stopped making up stories, a boy that no one talked to, a person that was scared to be himself, a son that runs away, a
 child with no stable home, one who lives with his aunt, someone who is blessed with great friends like Jem and Scout.SD You can tell when people are lonely because they are gloomy in comparison they are trying to be something they are not. CM You can see that they are pretending to smile and laugh, almost like they are searching for happiness. CM You could have a million  friends but still be lonely, if no one is there to talk to you.  CS Having a lonely life has side effects; you can be lonely without even knowing it.

  SD Lots of people in the world are lonely; you just might not know it. CM Sometimes when my family and I drive past homeless people on the highway, holding up signs, asking for food, wishing that they had a safe place to sleep, wondering if there was going to be a next meal, hoping that someone would care enough about them to listen, catching them when they fall, I think the people are lonely. CM I can't help but think that they are alone in this world; they must not have anyone to talk to.When no one will talk to you, you can't help but become lonely. CM They are longing to be heard by anyone that will listen. SD I haven't had many experiences when I have been lonely. CM Sometimes when I go on vacation I feel "lonely", although my family does a lot of things together we also want to do things apart. CM I often find myself alone, sitting on a hammock, reading a book, or taking a walk. CM The rest of my family are doing things that they want to do, my dad  is scuba diving, my mom is watching my younger sister, and my brother is running around and making new friends. CM I don't have a problem with being "lonely" on vacation; I enjoy the separation sometimes, getting to relax and do things on my own. CS Maybe we could all try to listen to someone else, "what goes around comes around"; next time maybe someone will be there to listen to you.
     
        Being lonely isn't something that people should fret over. If they are happy with their life and the way that they are living nothing else matters. Not even what other people say if you are truly happy than, your not lonely your sole is full of happiness not loneliness. Maybe in the end you could find peace in being lonely.

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  2. Dear Hanna,

    I like your two opening paragraphs because I thought they were very well thought out. They really impacted the reader. I suggest that you bold the sentence labels like CM and SD because it makes them easier to see. I also suggest that if you bold one word in italics you should bold all the words in italics, but I thought your two paragraphs were superb, and I enjoyed reading your Essay.

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  3. Dear hanna,
    I like your whole essay and its structure. I think in your first body paragraph you used an appositive instead of a participle. Also in the second paragraph you didn't bold anything so I couldn't tell where your echo and FAST words are. Besides those two things and a few punctuation errors your essay was very well thought out and creative and I enjoyed reading it a lot.

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