Essay #11

Essay 11

Teenagers in 2011 Have Many Struggles

An Essay by Hanna Rose Kronholm

Mr. H. Salsich

Tuesday, April 5 , 2011

          There are so many problems that teenagers now a days,in 2011, have to face. Thing to worry about are always on our minds, homework, grades and electronics. Most of us are usually thinking about our grades and striving to do better on ever assignment .

             Teenagers in 2011 struggle with many problems, along with many perks too.  The first and biggest issue would be the amount of homework and the pressure to keep our grades up. Most teenagers, who are in middle school around the age of 13, spend a lot of time on homework every night. It’s very challenging to balance out your time for fun things while keeping your grades up. Furthermore, the amount of technology used is a perk most of the time. On the other hand it sometimes would be easier without it. We all spend time on our phones, playing video games, ect., We have to worry about printing things out and e-mailing, when it would be a lot easier to hand write most of the work. We also have to worry about things that our parents didn't, they could walk to school everyday with out a problem or worry of being unsafe, and didn't have to fret. The world is defiantly not as safe as when our parents went to school.  Although our parents lived in a safer world because there was less crime and worry teenagers of 2011, have the complete surety of medical support and very well trained doctors that our parents didn’t have when they were young.

               Personally as a teenager in 2011 I don't have to many struggles that other teenagers don't have. The first one would be having younger siblings, kids that always want to be with you, children that aren’t always easy to pros wade, a girl and boy who fight occasionally. Although they look up to me they are usually quit annoying and bothersome. Having younger siblings, that are always there asking you question wanting to do things unsafely and making a mess, is a great learning experience but it is hard to learn how to deal with them in a way that doesn’t make them angrier. Another challenge I personally had over the last year was watching my mom fight off breast cancer, going through Kimo-Theropy once a week for 3 months and radiation every day for 4 months. It was hard on all of us, but especially me being the oldest having more responsibilities. I learned a lot from my mom going through breast cancer and it was quite a struggle. I am very thankful that she fought it off though.

          Although we as teenagers have so much to worry about, we always find a way to overcome our obstacles. We learn from our mistakes, from the problems that we have in 2011. Teenagers grow and learn from all the challenges we have to deal with.  

Self Assessment-

1.)  One issue that I am working on in my essays is to have appositive sentences that flow into the sentence before and the sentence after. I worked especially hard on this essay to make everything flow with elegance.

2.)  One thing that I thought I did particularly well on was have the right amount of fast words, bell words and echo words. In this essay I decided to put extras in to make the paragraphs and over-all essay better.

3.)  I could next time work on making my sentences that aren’t appositives longer than they are. I think it would make the essay better so next time I am going to work especially hard on that.

4.)  On this essay #11 I decided to give my self a B. Because I think that it’s not my best writing because I had trouble coming up with good ideas and commentaries. This was a especially hard topic for me to work on but I feel I worked to the best of my abilities.